When we read, we experience these sensations vicariously. A good writer makes readers smell, hear, taste, see, and feel what’s going on. Using the active voice is one of the easiest and most effective writing tools to accomplish this. In a nutshell: the active voice is when the character is in action; the passive voice describes the character receiving the action. Here are three ways of changing passive voice to active voice:
Have the character perform the action.
The 10K race was run by Katie in record time. (passive)
Katie ran the 10K race in record time. (active)
Four socks, two dishtowels, and a washcloth were removed from the Labrador’s stomach. (passive)
The veterinarian extracted four socks, two dishtowels, and a washcloth from the Labrador’s stomach. (active)
Avoid using not.
Connor did not feel that listening to his economics professor was worthwhile. (passive)
Connor felt that listening to his economics professor was a waste of time. (active)
The economics professor did not like Connor’s attitude. (passive)
The economics professor thought Connor’s attitude was disrespectful. (active)
Make your writing titillating, rather than tedious.
We were knocked over when the wave hit the boat. We became drenched when the hatch opened and water came in. I was sent flying and hit the edge of the radio shelf. My head ached and I could feel blood dripping down my neck. (passive)
“A wave washed over the boat, knocking us abeam. Water cascaded through the hatch over Don, over me. The impact sent me face first into the edge of the radio shelf. My forehead stung, and I felt blood dripping down my neck.” (active)
(From Réanne Hemingway-Douglass’s (our publisher) bestselling book, Cape Horn: One Man’s Dream, One Woman’s Nightmare.